1. Dubiuz avatar

    On Wed, Mar 17, 2010 at 10:51 AM, Dubiuz said:

    good writing, the biggest tip my professor gave me that i think might be useful here is varying sentence structure -things like switching between passive and aggressive voice. for example instead of :
    "His side of the silk sheets was soaked through from his perspiration. He sat up on the edge of the bed, wiping of his sweaty forehead with his hand."
    try something unconventional but more interesting to the reader:
    "Perspiration had soaked through his side of the silk sheets; Wiping his sweaty brow he sat up on the edge of the bed."

  2. Dubiuz avatar

    On Wed, Mar 17, 2010 at 10:51 AM, Dubiuz said:

    good writing, the biggest tip my professor gave me that i think might be useful here is varying sentence structure -things like switching between passive and aggressive voice. for example instead of :
    "His side of the silk sheets was soaked through from his perspiration. He sat up on the edge of the bed, wiping of his sweaty forehead with his hand."
    try something unconventional but more interesting to the reader:
    "Perspiration had soaked through his side of the silk sheets; Wiping his sweaty brow he sat up on the edge of the bed."